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Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people's lives. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the modern era
consumer
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 items,
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 as mobile phones and computers play the crucial role in human
life
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Although
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 there are some drawbacks of these goods,
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 there are many benefits of them.
This
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consumer
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 gadgets in the subsequent paragraphs in an efficacious way
To begin
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 with,
consumer
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 goods
have make
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have made
 the human
life
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 easier, but due to
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 trend, individuals become lazy and are not ready to do their own
work
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 on time
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In addition
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 to
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 they become dependent. To illustrate modern man left his job on machines, due to
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 their brains become ill and they cannot
work
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 more.
Moreover
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,
work
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 done by artificial intelligence is not always effective.
Although
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 job performed by technical devices is accurate and save time, but sometimes these devices
also
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 make huge mistakes. To
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, washing machines cannot remove the deep stain upon the particular fabric. On the flip side
,
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although
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 artificial intelligence
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has
 a few drawbacks, it has many benefits. Primarily, can get the
work
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 done within minutes.
Additionally
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, travel is easy by transport sources.
For instance
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, buses and trains can lead the distances of miles in some hours, while walking takes days to reach the destination.
Furthermore
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, communication becomes very easy. A person can contact his kith and kins from any corner of the world to anywhere.
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example, some
 group of people
have
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has
 to stay outside the country due to business reasons, they can easily chat with their loved ones with the help of mobile and computers. Apart from that,
consumer
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 items provide facilities to live a luxurious
life
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. All in all the advantages of artificial intelligence are wider than its disadvantages. To conclude, consumable gadgets not only provide facilities to live an easy
life
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, but
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 a need in
globalisation era
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the globalisation era
. Without these
consumer
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 items
life
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 cannot be possible in modern society.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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