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Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people's lives. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

In the modern
era
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era,
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consumer
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 items,
such
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 as mobile phones and
computers
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computers,
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 play
the
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a
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 crucial role in human
life
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.
Although
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 there are some drawbacks
of
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to
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 these goods,
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also there are
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there are also
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 many benefits
of
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to
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 them.
This
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 essay will discuss both
pros
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the pros
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 and cons of
consumer
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 gadgets in the subsequent paragraphs in an
efficacious
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effective
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 way
To begin
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consumer
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 goods have
make
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made
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the
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apply
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human
life
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 easier, but
due to
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this
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 trend, individuals become lazy and are not ready to do their own
work
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 on time .
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 to
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this
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this,
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 they become dependent. To illustrate
modern
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, modern
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 man left his job
on
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to
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 machines,
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this
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this,
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 their brains become ill
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, and
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 they cannot
work
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 more.
Moreover
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,
work
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 done by artificial intelligence is not always effective.
Although
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job
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the job
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 performed by technical devices is accurate and
save
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saves
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 time, but sometimes these devices
also
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make
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sometimes make
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 huge mistakes. To
examlify
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, washing machines cannot remove the deep stain
upon
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from
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 the particular fabric. On the flip side ,
although
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 artificial intelligence
have
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has
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 a few drawbacks, it has many benefits. Primarily, can get the
work
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 done within minutes.
Additionally
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, travel is easy by transport sources.
For instance
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, buses and trains can
lead
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cover
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the
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apply
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distances of miles in some hours,
while
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 walking takes days to reach the destination.
Furthermore
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, communication becomes very easy. A person can contact
his
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their
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 kith and
kins
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kin
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 from any corner of the world to anywhere.
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 some
group
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groups
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 of people have to stay outside the country
due to
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 business reasons, they can easily chat with their loved ones with the help of mobile
and
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phones and
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 computers. Apart from that,
consumer
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 items provide facilities to live a luxurious
life
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. All in
all
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all,
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 the advantages of artificial intelligence are wider than its disadvantages.
To conclude
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, consumable gadgets not only provide facilities to live an easy
life
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, but
also
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 a need in
globalisation
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the globalisation
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 era. Without these
consumer
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 items
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life
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, life
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cannot
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would not
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 be possible in modern society.

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planning
Plan your essay before you write. Decide your view first and keep it to the end.
structure
Put one main idea in each paragraph. Start with a clear sentence to tell the point of the paragraph.
grammar
Use plain words. Check grammar small, like verb form and plural.
content
Add short and real examples that fit the idea to back up your point.
content
The essay shows you want to discuss both sides.
content
There are real examples such as transport and washing that you mention.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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