Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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ndustry revolution

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the industrial revolution

industrial revolution

and increasing technology, the machines and robots became real and those have been dominating many p

art

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parts

of our life.

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change has several benefits but

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, there are some serious disadvantages. The

first

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of disadvantage is that mankind's jobs are losing by robots. Most of companies and factories use more machines than hire people; those can work w

hole day

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the whole day

and more cheaper than p

erson.

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people

a person

In my view, after 50 y

ears most

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years, most

of career will be destroyed by them

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, due to increasing the rate of losing jobs,

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average earning money per each person will decrease. Everyone's lives will be harder than h

igh-tech century.

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a high-tech century

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, the rate of birth is going to decrease; people do not need to earn money and go outside. So, after 5 decades, maybe the number of mankind will be half than now.

On the other hand

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, the

first

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benefit is that companies/factories can reduce their money because using them is more cheaper, so they will concentrate to make a m

ore high

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higher

highest

quality and low price things from f

actory.

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the factory

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, in agriculture, the farmers can use them; they can cultivate a lot of crops than before,

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of it, the cost of crops will decrease. T

han,

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Then

we can buy crops more cheap p

rise.

the property of having material worth (often indicated by the amount of money something would bring if sold)

price

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, our activities during leisure time will improve

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as games, movies, dramas... . We can enjoy our break time more r

elaxable

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even babies, elder citizens and f

amales.

a social unit living together

families

The i

ndustry

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industrial

industrious

revolution is making our life better,

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owever there

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however, there

are

also

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dangers. Please be careful to use them and d

evelope

make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation

develop

the level of life.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

268 words

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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

Traffic and accommodation problems are increasing and government should encourage some businesses to move from cities to rural areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Young people are highly influenced by famous people and they look up to them as role models. Is that a positive or negative development?

As English becomes more widespread as a lingua franca , there is concern that the values and culture of the English-speaking world will displace native values and cultures. To what extent is this fear justified?

Doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly. However, many of them do not get enough exercise. What are the reasons? What can be done to encourage them to exercise more?

A gift (such as a camera, a soccer ball, or an animal) can contribute to a child's development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.