Some people support profesional women as it is good economical growth of a country.Whereas some other people think otherwise indicating family affairs connected to the most of the women. Disscuss both these views and give your opinion.

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disscusion
an extended communication (often interactive) dealing with some particular topic
discussion
discussions
decision
of whether or not our women flocks should involve in outdoor activities along with their male colleagues, is a matter of serious controversy.I think both groups are to some extent logical though the benefits of having female professionals in today's economy are worth appreciating. According to the
first
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view, women should spend most of their waking moments taking
care
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of only household commitments rather than going out to
persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
professional identity as they think women are meant to be like that.Individuals who want to keep busy their female family members in doing only family staff often come with concern that if
female
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females
a female
do not stay at home,
their
in or at that place
there
will be
literaly
in a literal sense
literally
no one to take
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of the children as only women can take a good
care
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of those children and prepare them for the future. A group of progressive minds,
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,
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is
highly existed to share responsibility with their female counterpart as they believe that keeping
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huge portion of working
hands
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hand
in darkness no development work is possible.It is highly evident that women always
performe
carry out or perform an action
perform
performed
better in some areas
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as health and education sector
incomparison
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in comparison
to their male partners. In my opinion, we need a proper guide and
care
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giver for our children no one else other than women can be a good choice in
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regard.
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, we
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need to think about our
economical
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economic
growth where women can play a major role;
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I would like to see
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a work environment where women will have
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
opportunities
to serve country by working in office to gather with their family
responsible
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responsibilities
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