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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, However, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #boys #girls #schools #benefit
Many people
have believe
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have believed
 in separate
education
 for girls and boys is better.
while
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While
,
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 opine that co-
education
 is beneficial in learning. In
this
 essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will discuss both the views. On the one hand, study of girls in
boys
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boys'
 school is not good because of the thought of people's
.
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.
However
,
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,
 they thought
education
 in schools of boys for girls impact bad on their behaviour
.
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.
For example
, because of environment of criminal with no justice
.
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.
On the other hand
, some masses think that
education
 of girls and boys in
same school
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the same school
 is compulsory for
every one
all people
everyone
.
In addition
, co-
education
make
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makes
good impact
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a good impact
 on the life of
students they learn
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students as they learn
 how to survive and how to react when they are in some trouble.
Moreover
, in
this
 type of
education
 they understand both each other the reaction and behaviour of girls and boys
.
Accept space
.
 In conclusion
,
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,
 thought of people study in
same school
Suggestion
the same school
 for girls and boys in not better.
however
Suggestion
However
, other
hand some
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hand, some
 persons think that is much better to study co-
education
 rather than separated.
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  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
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