Nowadays people use social media to keep in touch with others and be aware of the news. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Social media plays pivotal role in today's competitive world in spreading new sand keep in touch with loved ones. While there are lots of benefits
from
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,
there
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a considerable amount
of drawbacks which is addressed
accordingly
. On one hand
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it is axiomatic to state that, there are rising numbers of positive effects which derived from social media.
Firstly
, it plays a main role in contacting with our relations, friends and business people. In personal perspective, social media allows teenager to make friends online who share similar interest and
also
with
help
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the help
of
skype
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Skype
a student can contact with her teacher to take
lesson
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a lesson
the lesson
with out
in absence of
without
meeting in
study room
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the study room
physically.
Further
elaborating my view
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communication was much more difficult when it was limited to written letters and telegrams
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but today
this
has become
simple
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simpler
and quicker due to the development of social media
such
as
skype
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Skype
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a slender and greatly elongated substance capable of being spun into yarn
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and other facilities. In
business point
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a business point
of view, business people have ability to collaborate online meetings rather than meeting in one place for a one hour meeting and
this
will be much more productive as well
this
will save time and money as well.
Secondly
, social media
such
as
facebook
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Facebook
has become the top medium of spreading news among people all over the world within few minutes. Thereby the advantages of social media can
been
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be
seen clearly.
On the other hand
, we should not forget the negative effects of social media.
This
will be directly heading to isolate real relationships since people give priority to virtual
relationships not
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relationships, not
only
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that, but
also
social media keep spreading
wrong news
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the wrong news
as a result
this
will lead to
social and personal problem
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social and personal problems
the social and personal problem
among people.
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conclusion, it is clear that social media has both positive and negative effects while I believe advantages overweight the disadvantages
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But still it is important to use these services more wisely
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