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What are the advantages and disadvantages of having older people living in the family home? Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In many traditional cultures, members of the same family will live together from childhood to old age. In many cases, older family members living at
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a trend which has
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 positive and negative aspects. A significant point in favour of
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a good support network for parents,
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of whom may work outside of the
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. Having grandparents on hand to look after t
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children can potentially provide a more stable environment as the child will have a familiar face at
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 until the parents have finished working. I
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. They are able to provide a source of advice and knowledge that can greatly benefit all members of the family on a range of subjects, especially for when there are n
ew born
recently born
newborn
babies in the
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 can be a stressful time for new parents. There are, of course,
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 disadvantages in having older people at
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. There is the issue of space, as the family
home
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 may not be big enough to accommodate everyone comfortably. There is
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 the issue of deciding which members of the family should live together, as
both
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 the husband and wife may
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 have surviving parents. To conclude, there are clear positives and negatives to having older members of the family living in the same house.
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 at times there may be frictions typical when people live together,
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 is arguably outweighed by the advantages of the support and knowledge older people are able to offer.
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