Choose one activity outside of class (e.g. extracurricular, community-based, home, volunteer, or work) that you have spent a significant amount of time participating in over the past year or more. Tell us about what it is and the impact it has had on you and those around you.

On my
last
birthday, my parents advised me to go to the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
Old Age Home. From the window of school-bus, I used to see a lot of old aged persons sitting inside
this
building but never got an opportunity to meet them. I went and met the manager of the old age home and donated money and eatables. Looking at my curiosity, the manager took me around the building and explained that
this
is “
Ashram
” and it is for old age people. Their aim is to lessen the hardships of old age persons by rehabilitating them. He told that
Ashram
runs on government funding and donations received from the general public. He categorically told that funds and donations are too
low but
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low, but
some-how
in some unspecified way or manner; or by some unspecified means
somehow
they are managing the show. I saw that the residents are mostly
old
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older
persons who in their life have performed all their responsibilities and have retired. Not only do residents need monetarily support but
also
some volunteers who should spend some quality
time
with them. I noticed that children of these residents are too busy with their schedules and are not taking proper care of them. I was satisfied after meeting some of the elderly residents and during
this
time
my mind had somewhere decided that I will be visiting
Ashram
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the Ashram
Ashrams
again and again. The visit, in fact, changed my outlook towards old aged persons and cemented my belief in “giving back to society”. From
this
visit, I found that
Ashram
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the Ashram
is in the need of a few volunteers who can donate funds and spend some quality
time
with these elderly persons. After that, every weekend I volunteered to take one of my friends or relatives to the
Ashram
. During these visits, I always explained to persons that their small donations and
time
will make residents of
Ashram
happy and in return, they themselves will
also
feel satisfied and happy that they are paying back to their society. In one year, I engaged more than twenty like-minded volunteers who are now regularly visiting
Ashram
. I feel happy that with my small effort I have engaged a lot of volunteers who are working for the benefit of
Ashram
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the Ashram
. When I go to
Ashram
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Ashrams
the Ashram
an Ashram
, I always salute the founders of
this
Ashram
for their efforts in making
this
Ashram
and someday in my life I dream of building one
such
Ashram
for the society.

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