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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

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Nowadays, a plenty of people prefer to leave their countries and they decide to go to abroad for different purposes as studying or finding new jobs for
long period
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a long period
long periods
 of
time
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. Especially
young generation
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the young generation
 would like to go overseas countries for studying.
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, leaving your motherland and travelling to foreign countries
have
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has
 pros and cons. In
this
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 essay, I am going to talk about both sides of
this
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 kind of decision and to conclude my opinion about going to foreign countries for
significant period
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a significant period
significant periods
 of
time
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. If we look at
positive sides
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the positive sides
 of moving to overseas countries, we can easily see that there are plenty of advantages that people can benefit from them.
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, one of the main thing is that if somebody travels to
different
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different countries
a different country
country
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 with different culture, language, cuisine and different people, all of these factors will lead
to broaden
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to broadening
 his or her horizon. As a
person
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 meets with new people and new places, it helps a lot for learning new experiences.
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, moving to abroad leads people for improving the quality of their
living
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lives
 or studying because most of the people goes to overseas countries in order to work or study in much better places. By the help of new workplaces and highly well-known universities, people can get advance knowledge and
also
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 new and different working experience which will be much helpful for that
person
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 when he or she comes back to his or her
country
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. As we have looked at benefits of travelling to
new overseas
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a new overseas country
the new overseas country
country
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 for leaving, there are actually some drawbacks. When a
person
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 leaves his or her own
country
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 and tries to spend a long
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time in abroad
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time abroad
, it will affect negatively and will lead to homesickness. If anyone has been living in
foreign
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a foreign country
country
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since
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for
 a long
time
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, that
person
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 wants to meet family, relatives or friends.
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, that problem
can not
can not
cannot
 be solved via telephone, Skype and other communication methods. In conclusion, we can say that going overseas countries for a significant period of
time
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 has benefits as getting new experiences, changing scenery, meeting new people and broadening your horizon,
however
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, at the same
time
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 it has got some drawbacks as well which will lead to some problems as homesickness,
adaptation
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adapt
 to
new culture
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a new culture
 and place. I think
that
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that's
 going to abroad
helps
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help
helping
 you to improve yourself.

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