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The diagram below comperes the illicit alcohol sales between three geographic regions

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The diagram
illustrate
Suggestion
illustrates
 illicit
alcohol
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 sales divided into
three
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 Geographic regions.
To begin
Linking Words
 with
,
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,
Eastern Europe in
aggreate
formed of separate units gathered into a mass or whole
aggregate
 data for 2 countries and in
europe
the 2nd smallest continent (actually a vast peninsula of Eurasia); the British use 'Europe' to refer to all of the continent except the British Isles
Europe
 total
alcohol
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 consumption 16604059
hl
an opening into or through something
hole
lae
Suggestion
Lae
lace
 and in
latin
relating to languages derived from Latin
Latin
america
North American republic containing 50 states - 48 conterminous states in North America plus Alaska in northwest North America and the Hawaiian Islands in the Pacific Ocean; achieved independence in 1776
America
aggreate
formed of separate units gathered into a mass or whole
aggregate
 data is
highest
Suggestion
higher
 than
europe
the 2nd smallest continent (actually a vast peninsula of Eurasia); the British use 'Europe' to refer to all of the continent except the British Isles
Europe
 and
africa
the second largest continent; located to the south of Europe and bordered to the west by the South Atlantic and to the east by the Indian Ocean
Africa
. Total
alcohol
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 consumption is 14990777hl
lae
Suggestion
Lae
law
 and in
africa
the second largest continent; located to the south of Europe and bordered to the west by the South Atlantic and to the east by the Indian Ocean
Africa
 10657163 from that
three
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 in higher eastern
europe
the 2nd smallest continent (actually a vast peninsula of Eurasia); the British use 'Europe' to refer to all of the continent except the British Isles
Europe
.
lllicit
Suggestion
Illicit
Lllicit
alcohol
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 consumption that
also
Linking Words
 higher Europe and smallest
hl
an opening into or through something
hole
lae
(astrology) a person who is born while the sun is in Leo
Leo
law
lee
 has
latin
relating to languages derived from Latin
Latin
america
North American republic containing 50 states - 48 conterminous states in North America plus Alaska in northwest North America and the Hawaiian Islands in the Pacific Ocean; achieved independence in 1776
America
.
However
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,
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,
llicit
contrary to accepted morality (especially sexual morality) or convention
illicit
licit
alcohol
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 sales and share of
lllicit
contrary to accepted morality (especially sexual morality) or convention
illicit
alcohol
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 both in higher global
alcohol
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 trade sale of
alcohol
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 in higher Europe and share
alcohol
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 in
africa
the second largest continent; located to the south of Europe and bordered to the west by the South Atlantic and to the east by the Indian Ocean
Africa
.
Linking Words
furthermore fiscal
Accept comma addition
Furthermore, fiscal
Furthermore fiscal
 loss in there
three
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country mostly increase
Suggestion
countries, mostly increases
countries mostly increase
countries mostly increases
country mostly increases
 in Africa.
global
Suggestion
Global
alcohol
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 trade
compare
Suggestion
compares
on
Suggestion
with
to
three
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 that the
latin
relating to languages derived from Latin
Latin
america
North American republic containing 50 states - 48 conterminous states in North America plus Alaska in northwest North America and the Hawaiian Islands in the Pacific Ocean; achieved independence in 1776
America
aggreate
formed of separate units gathered into a mass or whole
aggregate
 data provide into 14 countries. To conclude, the highest quality of
alcohol
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 in all sales representative to the Eastern Europe.
loss
Suggestion
Loss
 of
this
Linking Words
alcohol
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 sales in Africa.
in
Suggestion
In
 the countries constitution is Latin America

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