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Some say that university students should be free to choose their subjects. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study courses of future benefits like science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Studying a self-chosen subject in higher institutions has been considered by some to be acceptable while others feel that the emphasis should only be on subjects of future benefits
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 as science and technology. In my opinion, it should be the duty call of scholars to decide what course suits them. Both views will be discussed in detail. The main reason why some believe undergraduates should freely choose their career part is that we never can tell what courses will dominate in subsequent decades. Perhaps it may be that other subjects
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 as law will dominate later on as it is being apparent that legal issues would be rampant in the not too distant future. A particularly good example is the USA, a democratic nation, where lawyers and judges are being aggressively sought due to multiple court cases requiring their services.
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, if they follow their favourite profession, there is a tendency to securing high-paying jobs.
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, others feel that core science subjects should be mandated because they tend to improve the standard of living. As recent advances made in these fields are already with us today;
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 as mobile phones, which have revolutionized communication, with possible economic stimulation and job creation, there is no doubt, as they say, citizens would experience remarkable improvements in their lives. A case in point is Apple Company, a tele-communication giant, which accounted for the highest source of internally generated revenue in China
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, they believe these courses have positive bearings in the society and as
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 should be made compulsory. In conclusion, both arguments have their merits. On balance,
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, it seems to me that students should be given free hands when making course selection.
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 is because, if students are forced to study courses they do not fancy, they are unlikely to excel. Only in
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 way - freedom of choice - can society gain immensely from university education.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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