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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach everyone a person how to be good parents. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is often considered that parental skills need to learn to students in their school curriculum so that learners can tackle problems which are faced by parents while, according to my perspective it can effect on their
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minds
 and his notion create few troubles
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 as anxiety.
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 of view in the upcoming paragraphs before reaching relevant consequences. On the brighter side, it is undoubtedly that parents play an essential role in juvenile's
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 and they tackle various up and down during their
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life namely
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life, namely
 corresponding financial and upbringing which could not be realized by
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the children
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, if
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the teenager
a teenager
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understands
 awareness about the parent's responsibility, they will be capable bear up difficulties which are being faced by their father and mother
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 to a survey of Cambridge University, it is being seen that in pursuit of grabbing money, people are violating the family relationships; owing to lack of knowledge regarding these type challenges.
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, educators need to give guidance to students for alleviating problems so that they can easily survive their
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 with family. On the
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 claimed that it is not indispensable in the academic curriculum because pupils are psychologically immature and unable to comprehend the importance and obligations of good parents before stepping into the society.
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, in school have to concentrate on the theoretical and practical part which have an imperative way in order to suicide in their upcoming days. After that, they will able to ameliorate the problems related
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economies
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, despite collecting technique to solve the house hurdles, they ought to focus on their fundamental subjects so as to manage easily their monetary barriers. To conclude,
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 parental skills are important in
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everyone's
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 for strong connections with family, during school time it is more likely bad impact on their carrier that's why with the help of academic study that can mitigate almost all
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problems
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