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Today, the high sales of popular consumers goods reflect the power of advertising and not real need of society in which they are sold. What extent do you agree or disagree ?

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In
20th century
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the 20th century
, many products have been introduced via advertising. Among all of them, not every
product
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 is useful. Products should be categorized according to its need. Community people are purchasing items for no need and no reason. Advertisement is one of the most common cause to get attraction from
community
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the community
. Technology is participating into visual aspect and making
product
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 interesting by including their features.
However
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, they are not mentioning the specific use in day to day life. An individual is the
responsible
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responsibility
 to figure out its use. Advertisement is a combination of technology, features and their physical look. People
pretends
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pretend
 that popular consumers are having golden coin in the world. Attracted people are taking steps towards that direction, no matter what extend they need the
product
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.
In addition
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, It is an individual’s responsibility to understand their
need
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needs
. There should be no place to spend the money for something which is unnecessary. Sometimes, people do not consider the cost of the
product
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 too. As an example, If there is an item which is affordable but no need.
Still people
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Still, people
 are buying because it does not affect to their budget. On the other side, products are giving its worth. They are trying to introduce
latest technology
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the latest technology
 in their products. Some people is taking its positive perspective that it is important to purchase and other are not. Sometimes, people don’t realize
power
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the power
 of
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product
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the product
. As an example, smart watch
is taking
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has taken
takes
 vitals frequently and if there is an unusual change in it, it
give
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gives
 you a notification.
This
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 might helpful to save someone’s life. Overall, products are combo package which gives uncountable features. It is
societal responsibility
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a societal responsibility
 to determine about its necessity. One
product
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 is not important for me, but the same
product
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 is important for
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
. That means is others have it, that doesn’t mean I should have it.

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