Some people think that private schools have many advantages while others think there have many drawbacks for the community. Discuss both sides and give an opinion

It is irrefutable to say that education is extremely important for all people these days and everyone
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wants
best knowledge to attain from school.
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it is thought
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of
a group of masses that private school brings many advantages, other hold opposing
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views
and think that it have some drawbacks for
community
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the community
.
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refers to the speaker or writer
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accord that it
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has
both positive and negative
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effects
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Accept space
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which will discuss in my
further
paragraphs. There are some benefits to attaining
private education
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a private education
.
first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
is teachers are well-educated there and they have the responsibility of every single student regarding
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the study
.Apart from
this
pupils learn best knowledge from private education Center, which will be
make
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making
their
further
secure and choose their interest professions.In
this
way they would not be suffering in
further
life for finding Jobs.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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