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The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials Thea were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials Thea were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
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This
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 chart illustrates the percentage of paper and cardboard, glass containers,
aluminum
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 cans and plastic that were recycled in
special
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county
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 between 1982 and 2010 measured by
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percent
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. In 1994 the proportion of paper and cardboard
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reached its peak at exactly eighty
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,
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 it is obvious that it was at
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 point at almost
sixty five
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 in 1990. On the other side, in 1990 the proportion of glass containers
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decreased
at
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 exactly forty
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 and it was increasing after 1994, receptively.
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,
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 1982 and 2010 the proportion of
aluminum
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 cans
has
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increased until
its
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 reached
to
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around
forty five
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. Regarding
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ratio between 1990 and 2010 of plastics, the figure was steady at approximately ten
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.
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, as we have seen, the graph explains several
percentage
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 in four sectors
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interval
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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