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The first car appeared on the British roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use.

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Cars take
considerably place
Suggestion
a considerable place
considerable place
 in people’s Daily life. Cars make people’s life easier because travelling became substantially comfortable with driving them. In
this
 case, cars have lots of positive and negative sides as everything. In my opinion, cars have much more positive sides rather than
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 negative
sides but
Accept comma addition
sides, but
 if people know how to
use
 cars. If people don’t know how to
use
 cars, the result can be end of
finishing
the end of a word (a suffix or inflectional ending or final morpheme)
ending
 someone’s life.
This
 case is not only for human beings.
Also
 animals and other
alives
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
 can be affected by
this
 situation.
For instance
, if someone drives a car
uncarefully
, he or she can crash to another alive. It doesn’t matter if there
is
Suggestion
are
 human being or not. People shouldn’t be serial killer by cars. That’s why governments should be very
carefull
exercising caution or showing care or attention
careful
 about driving. Governments should check if
driver
Suggestion
a driver
the driver
 has driving license or not. If the driver
do not have
Suggestion
does not have
 license, government should give punishment to the driver.
On the other hand
, population of
World
Suggestion
the world
the World
 is increasing markedly, because of that,
numbers
Suggestion
the numbers
 of cars
also
inreasing
becoming greater or larger
increasing
 considerably. Global warming is increasing day by day and cars take huge place in
this
 situation. Cars are harming ozone layer with releasing
carbondioxide
Suggestion
carbon dioxide
 to
atmosphere
Suggestion
the atmosphere
. If
this
 situation continues like
this
,
next generation
Suggestion
the next generation
 will not have healthy earth. To prevent atmosphere, governments should encourage alternative transport forms.
Electrical
Suggestion
Electric
 cars can be
best
Suggestion
the best
 example
for
Suggestion
of
 that and people should
use
 public transports
instead
 of their own car if possible. In conclusion, people should know how to
use
 cars for health of
alives
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
 and governments should take some prevention to save atmosphere and earth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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