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Now the machines is very complex and a lot of difficult work is automated . Does this machine automation have more proses than cons?

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Numerous
herculean
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Herculean
 tasks can be done through machines as these have become advanced in the present scenario.
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it
have
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has
has had
 more demerits
instead
 of merits. There are a few advantages of it
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Firstly
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since in some industries people have to do
such
 complicated work that can be dangerous for their life, these automatic machines would be beneficial
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to
 that industry.
As a result
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human life can be saved by using machines despite humans
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due to some aetiologies
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a
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cracker
 factory
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in
 India caught the fire in which 300 workers were
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dying
 during 2017.
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also has
has also had
 various disadvantages. The major is that
this
 advancement may
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lead
 to unemployment because if machines used in industries at the place of 10 or 15 workers
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that
people
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person
 may have to lose their job.
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such
 workers cannot earn money due to loss of
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jobs
 which may
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tend
 to poverty. Apart from
this
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lack of creativity in machines is another demerit as machines can only do their work in industries despite develop them by giving new ideas.
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Mere
 humans can create
such
 ideas that can be helpful in the development of an industry. In conclusion
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although
 machines are
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the best way
 to do work
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in
 dangerous places
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these should not replace with humans in every industry since it can cause various hurdles for humans.

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