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Some people argue that technological invention, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 technological era, people are more dependent on using gadgets
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 as smartphones, which makes them less interactive with the society. I agree with the statement as the addiction to
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 is making people isolated.
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 has broadened the social gap between people by making them busy in their own work. There are many digital tools available
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 as mobile phones in the market nowadays and people are
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 in a habit to use them. The more use of
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 gadgets had made the humans depend on it and later they face the problem of isolation which makes them
less interactive
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less interaction
 with other people and only to indulge in their own work.
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, it was reported that the majority of the people have a habit of using smartphones continuously and had faced the problem of isolation and depression. People are continuous using the sophisticated technology which has affected their brains.
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, they do not think in a logical and a critical way. They are using these digital devices for their easy comfort, but side by
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side, they
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 have demolished their cognitive ability.
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, it was published in a newspaper ‘the Hindustan times’ that most of the adult population relies on technology and had stopped using their own brains which does not develop the cognitive skills. To conclude, the habit of using technological inventions are making people in a stage of loneliness as they do not feel important to be interactive with the society.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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