More and more people are moving away from an agricultureral background to relocate to cities in order to look for work.what will be the consequences of this? What solutions can you offer.

In
this
contemporary
era most
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era, most
of the people are fascinated about doing 8to 5 jobs while staying inside the air conditioned rooms rather than farming.
This
trend has been negatively affected to the prosperity and the
independency
freedom from control or influence of another or others
independence
in a country. Through
this
essay I intended to outline the problems and solutions to aforesaid phenomenon.
Mostely
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Mostly
in
Asian countries economy
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the Asian country's economy
Asian country's economy
is based on agriculture due to the ideal weather conditions they have for the cultivation. Unfortunately
migration
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the migration
of people
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
urban cities for finding jobs creates human resources vacuum in
agricultureral industry
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the agricultural industry
agricultural industry
.
Thus
a shortage in local food
produse
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production
produce
producer
produced
will
leads
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lead
to import all the food items from
overseas which
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overseas, which
can directly
affects
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affect
to the economy and the development in a country.
On the other
hand mostely
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hand, mostly
hand mostly
imported food items are not fresh enough and they are
genaticaly
by genetic mechanisms
genetically
improved to obtain
ample harvest
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an ample harvest
to reach their profit margins while ignoring their
neutricinal
of or relating to or providing nutrition
nutritional
values.
In
contrast there
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contrast, there
are some measures can be taken to mitigate
this
issue in order to reduce the negative impacts
further
more.
Firstly government
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Firstly, government
can promote cultivation among young
genaration
all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age
generation
generations
by giving a dignity to the farmers and offering them
basic infrastructure
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the basic infrastructure
to have a successful cultivation.
For instance low
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For instance, low
interest loan systems, knowledge of good
agricultureral
relating to or used in or promoting agriculture or farming
agricultural
practice
,
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,
new instruments and technical trainings can be provided.The ultimate
goalof
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goal of
being a successful farmer is the income.So it can be given to them by offering a good platform to sell their produce for a reasonable value to encourage them. To
sumup
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sum up
agriculture is playing a critical role in the survival
in
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of
human beings.
Thus it
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Thus, it
can not
can not
cannot
be neglected or replaced by another alternative.
Henseforth
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Henceforth
relocating cities for finding jobs make
this
issue worse unless we don't take aforesaid measures to beat the matter.

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