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Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is it the case? What can be done to attract local people to visit these places?

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It
 seems that
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 are more interested in historical places and museums than residents.
there
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There
 are some reasons behind
this
 and some feasible measures can be taken to attract more people in these places.
this
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This
 essay will look at causes for
this
 and propose some solutions.
This
 issue might be attributable to two main reasons.
To begin
 with
,
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,
local inhabitants are already familiar with their culture and having the experience of living in
this
 place and learn about it
at
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in
 schools
.
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.
therefor
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Therefor
, visiting these places
do not present
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does not present
 new information to them
.
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.
in
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In
 contrast, tourists are really curious about the destination and they are on holiday so it is obvious that they have the time and money to spend on historical sites.
furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
, cultural and historical places often charge an entry fee, which is in some cases expensive for low-income or even middle-income visitors. It will discourage them from going to museums and see repetitive artworks and ancient memento. Some practical solutions are suggested to mitigate the problem.
firstly
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Firstly
, the way forward might be to hold cultural events or galleries or at museums or historical sites to attract residents to these places.
a
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A
 good example of
this
 happened 3 years ago in Tehran
.
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.
national
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National
 museum of Iran hosted louver relics.
this
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This
 cooperation leads to an increase in the number of local visitors that year.
secondly
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Secondly
,
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,
encouraging more people to come to museums, local authorities can provide special discounts for the locals
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on
 the weekends or even free tickets in certain days of a year.
all
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All
 in all, I believe local people are not as motivated as tourists to visit their historical places because they don't have time or money and they do not find it an interesting place to visit
.
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.
as
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As
 I see it, governments have a role to play in absorbing people's interest.

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