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Some people argue that arts, such as paintings and music, are a waste of money and the government should spend its money on other public services instead of arts. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is argued that investments in arts and music has been just a wasting of resources, and the authorities should spend
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 money on public sectors. I do not quite agree with
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 view. In my opinion, the officials should allocate appropriate funding for both services. On the one hand, there are certainly ample reasons why people want the government to spend more money on public services.
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 and foremost, it improves the quality of life.
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, when the funds are utilized to build colleges and universities, it will help people to gain education and employment. Educated citizens are the biggest asset of any nation and
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 in my opinion, providing better educational facilities should be the priority of any national government.
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 but not least, with sufficient funding, the authorities can support other sectors like health, infrastructure and transport. All of these are crucial for the development of a nation and need sufficient funding.
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, there are many benefits if the officials support the arts. The plus point of preserving music and theatre is that it will help us conserve our national identity. As we all know arts and culture are interrelated, so by allocating some funds to the arts we can save our cultural uniqueness.
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, if the authorities stop supporting the music and theatre, they will see a great loss in terms of tourism. Most tourists visit a country to see their culture, and if travellers find nothing extraordinary about a culture, they are less likely to return. In conclusion, the government should use the balanced approach of supporting both public utilities and arts because both are important for a country to flourish.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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