Many people buy products that they do not really need and replace old products with new ones unnecessarily. Why do people buy things they do not really need? Do you think this is a good thing?
In today's modern era, new
products
are launched with
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in
a
blink Correct article usage
the
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of the
the
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an
eyes
, Fix the agreement mistake
eye
either
these are gadgets, clothes or kitchen items. Correct word choice
whether
However
, many people buy these products
unnecessarily even, if, they already have that
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that product
those products
products
in old form. In my opinion, buying new things, which are not in need are
just Unnecessary verb
apply
scrap
of cash. Change the article
a scrap
This
essay will further
elaborate the
reasons and negative effects of Change preposition
on the
this
trend and thus
will form a logical conclusion.
Analysing the statement the first and foremost reason behind this
trend is that
the pressure from Correct word choice
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
peer
and society. Fix the agreement mistake
peers
This
trend occurs differently in each category, such
as youngsters buy
new gadgets to show their friends and make a good impression in front of them. Wrong verb form
buying
Moreover
, women buy new products
such
as clothes, accessories and kitchen equipment to show off their status in front of other women. In addition
, men buy new products
such
as expensive clothes and automobiles to show off their reputation to their friends and colleagues.
Nevertheless
, buying new things which are not needed is just a waste of money, which also
allure
others to do the same. Verb problem
entices
Furthermore
, buying new gadgets also
a waste of money, but throwing Add a missing verb
is also
the
old ones not only wither wealthRephrase
away the
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
harm
the environment, because the batteries of these appliances produce harmful chemicals which cause pollution in the environment and that Correct subject-verb agreement
harms
further
cause disease and harm animals when they swallow it.
To conclude
, buying new substances which are not used harm
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harms
the
nature andCorrect article usage
apply
a
waste of money. Add a missing verb
is a
A authorities
if take huge steps Correct the article-noun agreement
Authorities
than
Correct your spelling
then
this
swing can be reduced.Submitted by kallyk90 on
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