Many people buy products that they do not really need and replace old products with new ones unnecessarily. Why do people buy things they do not really need? Do you think this is a good thing?

In today's modern era, new
products
are launched
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a
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eyes
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,
either
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these are gadgets, clothes or kitchen items.
However
, many people buy these
products
unnecessarily even, if, they already have
that
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products
in old form. In my opinion, buying new things, which are not in need
are
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just
scrap
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of cash.
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reasons and negative effects of
this
trend and
thus
will form a logical conclusion. Analysing the statement the first and foremost reason behind
this
trend is
that
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the pressure from
the
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peer
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and society.
This
trend occurs differently in each category,
such
as youngsters
buy
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new gadgets to show their friends and make a good impression in front of them.
Moreover
, women buy new
products
such
as clothes, accessories and kitchen equipment to show off their status in front of other women.
In addition
, men buy new
products
such
as expensive clothes and automobiles to show off their reputation to their friends and colleagues.
Nevertheless
, buying new things which are not needed is just a waste of money, which
also
allure
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others to do the same.
Furthermore
, buying new gadgets
also
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a waste of money, but throwing
the
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old ones not only wither wealth
,
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but
also
harm
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the environment, because the batteries of these appliances produce harmful chemicals which cause pollution in the environment and that
further
cause disease and harm animals when they swallow it.
To conclude
, buying new substances which are not used
harm
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the
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nature and
a
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waste of money.
A authorities
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if take huge steps
than
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then
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this
swing can be reduced.
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