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Some people believe that iraq should be right to attack U.S military base in Iraq and others deny that. Discuss about two opions

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The wreckage of Maj. Gen. Qassem
Soleimani
’s vehicle was still cooling on a Baghdad access road Friday when the recriminations against President Donald Trump’s assassination of Iran’s powerful Quds Force leader began. Foremost among them: The U.S.
has
Suggestion
Has
 triggered
Iran
Suggestion
the Iran
 to stage attacks on America’s troops, embassies, friends and infrastructure in the Middle East and around the world. As if Iran wasn’t already. The critique is based on the serious miscalculation that the U.S.
had
Suggestion
Had
 little to gain by taking out
Soleimani
 and that the consequences would be worse than what he and the regime were already doing. The reality is the opposite, and the public should welcome the fact that their leaders are taking bolder action to protect them from Iranian mayhem. Whether most Americans knew it or not,
Soleimani
 was already waging a shadow war with the West and its regional partners. At his direction, Iran built and supplied highly sophisticated explosive devices to militias targeting
U
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
us
.S.
troops
Suggestion
Troops
 in Iraq, killing at least 500 American service members, wounding many more, and making up nearly 20 percent of combat deaths in the country in the early years of the war. When the Pentagon noted after his death that
Soleimani
 “was actively developing plans to attack American diplomats and service members in Iraq” it was easy to believe. He’d already done it. Whatever danger
Soleimani
’s death might bring, danger
was
Suggestion
has been
 already present in lethal doses, and not just for Americans.
Soleimani
 intervened to salvage the Syrian civil
warfor
Suggestion
war for
 President Bashar al-Assad, organizing more than 100,000 fighters to prop up the crumbling, corrupt regime and planning the infamous campaign to retake the city of Aleppo from Syrian rebels in 2016. That
seige
the action of an armed force that surrounds a fortified place and isolates it while continuing to attack
siege
said
sage
 redefined
carnagein
Suggestion
carnage in
 the modern era, while the civil war overall sent thousands of refugees fleeing to Europe.

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