The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the chart gives information about how many
trips
children have done to travel to and from school in two different years and in five different categories of transportation.In 1990 walking was by far the most popular way to go to school, with about 12.5
millions
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million
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of
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trips
.
Cyclng
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Cycling
, walking and bus or just the bus were used in similar percentages ,
while
he
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lesser used was the car passenger.
However
,during
this
20.year
period
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the
last
way of transport
mentionated
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mentioned
before
has
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showed
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a significant increase, reaching around 11
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million
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millions
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million
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of
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in
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trips
in relation to the slightly 4
millions
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million
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showed
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in 1990.
On the other hand
, the remaining four modes of transportation have decreased enormously; as can be
seen
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by the chart only the bus declined less significantly with a difference of 2
millions
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million
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than the one
showed
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in 1990,
whereas
the other three have gone up to the half of their numbers of
trips
made before.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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