You have heard about plans to build new apartments in a public park near your home. You want to give your opinion about this. Write a letter to the editor of your local newspaper. In your letter • Explain how you learnt about these plans • Say what you think of the park • Give your opinion on the plans

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Dear Sir/Madam, The reason for writing

this

letter is to inform you about

construction

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the construction

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building

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a building

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at Kingsbridge

park

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Park

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.I heard about

this

plan from my morning work friend Aditya, who is an officer in

municipality

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office. According to him,

this

plan will start in six months.It is going to be a

twenty story

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high rising building similar to surrounding buildings. The

park

is beautiful at

Present

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present

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. Kids are playing till

evening

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after coming from school. Seniors are having morning

walk

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and yoga for fitness.There is a football court made by college students to play games during

weekend

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This

park

makes the area lively . everybody gets some greenery and peace of mind due to

park

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the park

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. In my opinion, the

park

should stick to the place

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lot

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a lot

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of civilians depends on it for daily relaxation.As a community,we want to talk to

mayor

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the mayor

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to diminish the proposal and we need your cooperation in the process. Your’s faithfully, Manaswini

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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7 paragraphs

157 words

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