At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweighs the disadvantages.

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The world’s

population

has increased tremendously over the past few decades. Currently, the majority portion of a country’s

population

comprises children and the adolescents when the census indices are carefully studied.

This

has led to disproportion among various age groups leading to a variegated picture. In my opinion, the younger people have overall more dis-credits as compared to benefits due to several factors. Looking at the un-employment that resultantly occurs, countries having more juvenile people are facing

this

problem acutely. To clarify

this

, I would argue that the jobs which are created in a specific society over a specific period of time are limited.

However

, when the number of

population

indices reverses

favoring

promote over another

favouring

the young, tough competition arises leading to

dramatic increase

Suggestion

a dramatic increase

dramatic increases

the dramatic increase

in un-employment. To give a clear example, Pakistan is among those countries that witnessed a rapid increase in the

population

over the

last

twenty years.

This

has contributed significantly towards a surge in younger graduates looking for a job. Contrary to

this

, it is generally accepted that the human resource plays a pivotal role in the growth of a country. By

this

I mean that as the number of earning hands increases, it leads to a rapid growth in the national exchequer.

For instance

, many European

countries especially

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countries, especially

Denmark, Finland and Norway are struggling hard to run their systems smoothly due to the non-availability of manpower. Other countries like Japan are propagating special packages to import literary people from around the world due to a sharp decline in their

population

growth.

Moreover

, the elderly now constitute the majority

thus

straining meagre resources due to increased expenditure on their

health-care

the preservation of mental and physical health by preventing or treating illness through services offered by the health profession

healthcare

and rehabilitation. To conclude, young people are a double edge

sword helping

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sword, helping

country’s economy

Suggestion

the country’s economy

in terms of human resource on one hand while adding to the liabilities on the other as far as employment and other social sectors are concerned.

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweighs the disadvantages.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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