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The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The tables illustrate the
amount
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 of potatoes which have been consumed and produced by five different continents in 2006. Units are measured in
kg
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 per person for consumption and
million
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tonnes
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 for production.
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, regarding
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consumption, it can be seen that
Europe
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 had shown the highest data among the other places,
while
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 the lowest intake had been experienced by Africa. In terms of production , the major
potatoe
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potato
 producers were
Europe
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 and Asia. In 2006, only 14.1
kg
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 per person of potatoes
have
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 been eaten in Africa, followed by South and
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Central
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America
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 and Asia which
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accounted
23.6
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kg and 25.8
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 respectively.
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 North
America
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reached 57.9
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 , succeeded by
Europe
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 which
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reported the most relevant value of 96.1kg. Regarding the producers, South and Central
America
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 with Africa have presented similar data ( 15.6 and 16,4
million
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tonnes
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 respectively),
as well as
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 North
America
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 has contributed
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24.7
million
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tonnes
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.
Europe
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 has produced 126.3
million
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tonnes
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 of potatoes, similar to Asia , which has collected 131.2million
tonnes
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kg, million, tonnes, europe, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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