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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of renting homes?

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With the growth of the popularity, the past decades saw there was a trend that people tend to
rent
 houses rather than buy it. Some maintain that renting homes
is
Suggestion
are
 positive more than negative. I
similarly
 believe
this
, my reasons are twofold. Admittedly,
most
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mostly
 the elder could argue that the houses would be the place in which they live for a long time, which can
makes
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make
 them feel safe and satisfied.
For instance
, comparing with those who
rent
 homes, people having their own homes do not need to worry about where they will stay or governments revise the policies on renting houses;
therefore
, the lake of feeling of safety is the disadvantage renting houses makes.
Nevertheless
, in fact, renting houses
brings
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bring
 the benefits more than the drawbacks. One indisputable benefit of renting houses is the cost. The cost renting homes
is
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are
 cheaper, which means people who
rent
 homes do not spend lots money on it.
Additionally
, with the increasing density of the popularity, the expenditure of buying homes grew dramatically. A case in point is that the elder who have their own homes and the affluent buy houses more than
that they
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that, they
 need as
investment
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an investment
, which contributed to the price of real estate increased so that the young adults can't help but
rent
 homes.
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Adding
 to the benefit, the cost, the freedom of choosing
to
being one more than one
two
 jobs is another advantage. With globalization, that the job
opportunities increased
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opportunities, increased
 caused the young adults have more chances to choose where they want to go to work and made job hopping common.
Therefore
, people do not need to be confined in a specific country to choose their
job
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jobs
.
For instance
, for people preferring
working
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to work
 abroad renting homes may be more suitable for them. In conclusion,
although
 renting homes have a drawback, it is still a better choice;
thus
, I firmly agree with that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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