These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children's behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowdays
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Nowadays
, people are watching different types of shows in the
telivision
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
.
some
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Some
type of the shows
are containg
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is continuing
are continuing
are content
violence and
also
harmful
for
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to
the children and they provide impact on children's behaviour.I
am strongly agree
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strongly agree
with
this
statement seeing augment amount. Of shows that
contaning
include or contain; have as a component
contain
continuing
violence on
telivision
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
and put the bad impact on children's behaviour.
Firstly
, in
this
morden
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
time some shows
contaning
include or contain; have as a component
containing
contain
huge fight scenes that
also
put
nagative
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
impect
the striking of one body against another
impact
impacts
on the
children
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children's
child's
child
behaviour while some children seeing that shows that memory continues thinking
this things
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these things
this thing
and trying to do
this
and
that is
detrimental
impect
the striking of one body against another
impact
impacts
on
tha
definite article
the
childrens
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children's
children
habit
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habitual
.
in
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In
addition that
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addition, that
some shows are providing children
knowledge but
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knowledge, but
others bad one is put the children
nagative
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
impect
the striking of one body against another
impact
impacts
.
On the other hand
, continusioly watching the telivison to harmful for the children eye and
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