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In the future, it seems more difficultto live on the Earth. Some people thinkmore money should be spent onresearching other planet to live, such asMars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The world population now is about 7.9 billion and is expected to increase to 9 billion around by 2050. With these people think the natural resources are becoming scarce so research should be done on any other habitable planet.
Although
, there are inherent problems, l believe spending on other planets is a waste of money. The major problem
that is
 being encountered on the
earth
Suggestion
earth's
 surface is due to environmental pollution.
This
 is caused by carbon dioxide from cars and burning of fossil fuels.
This
 has resulted to ozone layer depletion, increase in
earth
 temperature, change in weather conditions and
desertification
. Weather changes
has made
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have made
 food to be scarce, at the same
desertification
 has reduced the available usable land.
However
, people should be enlightened and sensitize on the reasons
on
Suggestion
in
this
 world must be a place to live. Government should invest more on green, energy and should be
less dependence
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less dependent
 on coal and fuels
for example
 using of battery cars. Pollution should be minimized by using biodegradable materials as packaging materials at the same time recycling must be considered.
Moreover
, spending huge amount of money on other planets does not guarantee life there, so it will be better go the government to spend money on social infrastructures like road, education, health and
also
 on recreational facilities. If people have all these cares the
earth
 will be a better place. In conclusion, in as much the
earth
 is faced with environmental degradation, it
doesn't sounds
Suggestion
doesn't sound
 wise in investing in another planet.

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