some people believe that it is bes to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and imorove such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There was a lengthy dispute about whether the main problem in the environment is the loss of certain
species
of plants and animals or something more essential. From my perspective, arguably, the problem in depleting the number of
species
is as vital as other environmental ph
enomenons.
any state or process known through the senses rather than by intuition or reasoning
phenomena
The argument of approving that extinction of vegetation and animals is the main problem is that it has negative impacts on our fragile earth. As these
species
disappearing, the biodiversity of the environment will be impeded to some extent by cutting food chains.
This
also
prevents the ecosystem from self-adjusting to the original situation until the environment totally lost the ability to recover. At the same time,
this
might lead to a disaster in animals, including mammals, fishes or even the human.
Furthermore
, the decreasing biodiversity will
also
create an unstable environmental system which might have many drawbacks on human's commercial product
such
as agriculture and aquaculture. The human stock market is likely to be impacted by
firstly
, which cause fear among people. Notwithstanding, other problems
such
as natural hazards, increasing atmosphere temperature and even human-leaded waste should put considerable notices.
Firstly
, more and more hazards caused by nature are not only ou
tcomes o
Suggestion
the outcomes
f geographical ac
tivities but
Accept comma addition
activities, but
also
signs which to some degree caused by human activity,
such
as the deforestation and desert, earthquakes and oil exploration.
Secondly
, as the financial and technology developments, the greenhouse ga
ses e
Suggestion
gas
mission produced by cars or factories. Because of hi
gher temperature,
Suggestion
the higher temperature
the gradually melting ice on the two-pole of the earth is a threat to
ward t
Suggestion
to
hese people who live in low altitude, and it increases sea level in 1 centimetre per year.
Finally
,
for instance
, because of the waste of pure water by the human being, we might need to ov
erexploit t
he underground water which might cause little earthquakes. In conclusion, I think that no matter the extinction of
species
and other environmental problems are equally important.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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