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The best way to learn about other cultures is to work in multinational organisation. Do you agree or disagree?

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With the increase in globalisation, multinational companies have set their foot firmly in different countries. It is a good way to learn about cultures by working
in
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with
 these
organisations
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organisations, although
although
, in my
opinion it
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opinion, it
 is not the best way to gather information of the native cultures.
This
 essay will discuss why working in multicultural companies is not
best
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good
 for people who want to learn different lifestyles and will provide my opinion on that. The main reason why people opt to
work
 in global companies is because of
chance
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the chance
 of getting out of their own country. Many people
likes
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like
 to explore the world by moving out of
there
of them or themselves
their
 nation and to try different traditions offered by other countries. But in many cases expectations of non-native citizens get destroyed because of high pressure of
work
 by these companies due to which workers do not get time to feel or indulge properly in the cultures.
For example
, a person whose
work
 is to interact with native citizens, has to understand the native language completely to provide the best service, but will not be able understand the culture. It is
provide
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provided
 in many studies that rather than working for multinational companies, travelling provides the best way to accumulate knowledge of various traditions by experiencing them in real time in
country
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the country
 and by talking the native citizens.
Furthermore
, main knowledge regarding the native culture is provided to only higher level members of the organisations.
For instance
, a person doing
front desk job
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a front desk job
 would be given less opportunities to
work
 with native
people whereas
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people, whereas
 people in
higher departments
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the higher departments
 like managers will be given more chances to
work
 with countryman. According to my perception, getting a job in MNC is good for travelling to different countries but is not ideal for a person who seek to gain knowledge of different cultures and traditions. In order to learn about diverse cultures, I would suggest to travel to the country for holiday and enjoy the distinct culture.
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