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some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

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There is an argument that centres on handling kids with
school
 with dormitories by which to the best selection for students or many negative effects to them. Even though boarding schools are a great chance for children, in my opinion, I highly believe that, young people stay with their parents is the greatest situation for them. On the one hand, many people say that students stay in
school
 house is the best option for their studies.
To begin
 with, if the kids are living far from their home, they can learn about how to stand alone, which makes them survive in the rough world and the time in the future.
In addition
, students can focus on studies more because it could be less chances when they stayed at own home.
As a result
, kids do not desire to help from others in their future and study harder and harder.
For example
, in my country schools that have a high grade of standard are mostly boarding schools,
this
 is proof that schools are better than others.
On the other hand
, how many boarding schools have good effect to them,
however
, some believe that a few important things make kids live at their house is better that dormitory.
Firstly
, students should spend time with their parents, which is the most important thing in their ages, they can talk, stay and learn from their guardians.
For example
, a few years ago, there was a research about
school
, in the result of it kids stay at schools have better result of the study,
however
 pupils who live with their parents are nicer and kinder.
Secondly
, kids spend time rather than study, young people should know about many things that outside of
school
, but if they just stick at
school
 they cannot learn about that.
Lastly
, boarding
school
 could teach them about independent mind, but that kind of things are can learn anywhere not only
school
. In conclusion,
although
 boarding schools have many great effects to children, in my point of view, I am convinced that young students stay with their parents is the best way to grow them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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