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Improvement in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Development of underprivileged countries in regard to the welfare and literacy of their people as well as their domestic production and commercial relations is crucial, and developed nations should be held more accountable to take required measures to assist them in
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 statement and it will mention some of the key reasons why. Foremost among reasons to help poorer countries appears to come from a historical perspective.
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 to say that developed countries benefited from inexpensive natural resources and workforce, coming from these underprivileged nations, for centuries, which has boosted their economies.
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-world nations colluded with politicians and people of power in underdeveloped nations to influence national politics, overthrow governments, and divide indigenous people.
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 has often led to civil wars in these countries,
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 as Ethiopia and Angola, and they are still suffering from the consequences thereof, namely sickness epidemics and adult illiteracy.
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 why developed nations should help alleviate the problems which they apparently engendered. Another prime reason to provide aid to poor countries appears to be the broad extent of their problems. Unless international organizations take globally-coordinated measures to elevate health, education and socioeconomic situation in underdeveloped nations, the local authorities would not have the required resources and knowledge to confront the issues.
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, finding a cure for illnesses,
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 as Malaria, requires international cooperation and funding, which if not provided, might result in an epidemic that can result in our collective demise. In conclusion, either from a historical point of view or a more self-concerning one, developed countries shall better hold themselves accountable to help less-developed nations alleviate their miseries,
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 as famine or drought. These miseries could escalate quickly to a global
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 might harm all humanity.
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