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Some people believe that to protect local culture, tourism should be banned in some areas whereas others think that change is inevitable and banning tourism will have no benefits.

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In the past decade,
tourism
 has become increasingly
popuplar
regarded with great favor, approval, or affection especially by the general public
popular
 among all countries,
however
 many are of opinion that in order to protect indigenous
culture
,
tourism
 should be forbidden. While other school of thought believes that, banning sightseer will have a profound
impact
 and
this
 cannot be avoided.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the argument and will draw a plausible conclusion. On the one hand, many tourists are influencing local communities when they visit their places. People from different countries wear their clothing as they normally do in their home
country
.
In addition
 to that, they behave intimately in public places which has a negative
impact
 on local communities.
This
 not only,
effecting
arousing affect
affecting
 their
culture
, but
also
 influencing teenagers to behave that way.
For example
, individuals in Pondicherry, India is deeply influenced by French
culture
 as many tourists visit
this
 place every year.
Therefore
, these are the reasons why these sections of people want
tourism
 to be banned. On the flip side, many are of opinion that banning
tourism
 will have no advantages, because
this
 will
impact
 Gross Domestic Product of one's own
country
. If they implement ban on sightseer, many jobs will be lost in a
country
 where the primary source of income is through
tourism
.
For example
, countries
such
 as Srilanka, Indonesia, Thailand are dependant on
tourism
, if they are forbidden tourists, it will significantly
impact
 their economy.
In addition
 to that, one's own
country
's
culture
 greatness, heritage and history cannot be known by other countries if they ban
tourism
. To conclude, many indigenous people are deeply influenced by tourists and it has adverse effects on local
culture
Suggestion
Culture
 whereas banning them will have a profound
impact
 on the economy. I personally believe that, the government should implement strict rules for people to protect local
culture
 rather than completely banning them.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influx of tourists
  • dilute local customs
  • commercialization
  • loss of native languages
  • economic benefits
  • revenue source
  • responsible tourism
  • cultural sensitivity
  • regulated tourist limits
  • cultural heritage
  • globalization
  • case study
  • ‘High Value, Low Impact’ tourism
  • controlled tourism
  • middle-ground solution
  • infrastructure development
  • significant revenue source
  • employment generation
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