Some people think that only the government can make significant changes in society, while others think that individuals can have a lot of influence. What is your opinion?

The Bar chart illustrates the comparison of how frequent children of age 5 to 12 have
traveled
traveled over or through; sometimes used as a combining term
travelled
to and from
school
using various
mean
Suggestion
means
of
transportation
in two years
that is
1990 and 2010. Overall
,
Accept space
,
the trend seems to be decreasing in 2012 except for the
car
which only increase with respect to 1990. The most widely preferred mode of
transportation
in 1990 was walking while,
car
Suggestion
the car
a car
was the most used mode of
transportation
in 2010. Going and coming to
school
by mean of cycling
,
Accept space
,
bus and walking and bus were almost the same in 1990
that is
6, 5.8 and 7
million
trips respectively.
whereas
Suggestion
Whereas
, in 2010 it decreases to 2, 3 and 5
million
trips respectively. Walking was the most preferable mode of
transportation
in 1990 about 12.4
million
trips were made by walking.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
Going to
school
by means of
car
Suggestion
the car
was not that common as only 4.2
million
trips were made in 1990. In 2010
,
Accept space
,
things changed as going to
school
by
car
was chosen as the
first
priority and about 11
million
trips were made using
car
Suggestion
the car
a car
.
whereas
Suggestion
Whereas
, walking which was highly preferred in 1990 significantly dropped to 6
millions
Suggestion
million
trips in 2010.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • society
  • government
  • changes
  • influence
  • policies
  • laws
  • intervention
  • societal issues
  • collective action
  • progress
  • development
  • harmonious
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