in many countries people are concerned about the number of children who are overweight. what do you think are the causes of this?what solutions can you suggest?

25 years ago, 17th of April, I was born as the
last
child in a family having 2 sons.
Although
I used to have a great relationship with my brothers, I always felt lonely.
This
feeling was always with me
untill
up to, before the time
until
I started my primary school.There was a girl whose name was Sima.She was pretty like me and had that lonely feeling.We accommodated to
eachother
Suggestion
each other
and after a while I noticed she had become my
besty
(superlative of 'good') having the most positive qualities
best
,
Accept space
,
just like a sister who I did not have.We got along well
,
Accept space
,
even we were named the twins by our teachers.Everything was fascinating and incredible
,
Accept space
,
till her family and
her
female pronoun; a female, or something regarded as female, e.g. a ship
she
was forced to move their home.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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