Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#artists #freedom #pictures #music #film

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

artists

Suggestion

Artists

should be allowed to create their own creation by means of pictures, music, words, film and etc.

without

Suggestion

Without

any restrictions. I agree with

this

Linking Words

statement because of human rights and

society

Use synonyms

flourishment

Suggestion

. As we know, artists express their ideas by means of their arts, so if they

do not be allowed

Suggestion

aren't allowed

are not allowed

are not allowing

aren't allowing

to express their

arts

Suggestion

art

, their freedom of expression will diminish obviously, which is against the human rights law, so it is better for authorities

to respect

Suggestion

respect

the rights of all walks of the life in their countries,

otherwise

Linking Words

they might be fined by international organizations.

Moreover

Linking Words

, if all artists

such

Linking Words

as writers, directors, painters and musicians could create their

arts

Suggestion

art

with an open mind, their talents would flourish more and more, which leads to make more creative arts.

increasing

Suggestion

Increasing

the creativity level in artistic production have

positive effect

Suggestion

a positive effect

on the motivation of the

society

Use synonyms

, which lead to spread great feelings and happiness for individuals, because I myself feel

positively

Suggestion

positive

and energetic when I see a creative film or painting.

to a very great extent or degree

I believe it is better to let our artists do their work in

such

Linking Words

a way that they wish.

However

Linking Words

, some people might say that, if artists can express their minds freely without any restrictions, it might be harmful

for

Suggestion

our authorities’ security. I disagree with

this

Linking Words

statement, because expressing the opinion of artists, could be conduct a useful competition between our authorities to do their responsibilities as well as they can, which leads to have a more efficient

society

Use synonyms

. In conclusion, I believe that, our artists should be allowed to create their own production without any barrier for respecting the human rights and

also

Linking Words

flourishing the creativity of the

society

Use synonyms

Submitted by mohamadi.alphagroup on Sat Jan 11 2020

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

6
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

283 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

4.5
band
Some people believe that it is the best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Whilst some people believe in accepting a difficult condition of life, others believe that every person deserves a hope for a better life condition. In my opinion everyone has a choice and certain reasons like unsatisfactory job or shortage of money cannot be a serious problem.
7
band
Some people argue that the government should spend money only on medical care and education but not on theatres or sport stadium.Do you agree or disagree?
There is a debate about whether the government should allocate funds exclusively to medical care and education, neglecting theatres and sports stadiums. I disagree with this viewpoint, as investing in cultural and recreational facilities is vital for the holistic well-being of society.
5.5
band
At the present time, the people of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
At the present time, the people of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. This essay will explain the advantages and disadvantages of this situation which shows a demographic skew towards younger populations.
7
band
A noticeable lack of students opting for science subjects at universities is observed in various countries. What are the reasons and what are the effects on society?
In recent years, more students tend to choose other majors rather than science subjects. This phenomenon is due to some reasons, and it would affect our society and economy.
4.5
band
Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?
In order to decrease the traffic pollution, some people think the increasing the price of petrol is a ideal way to deal with this problem, I agree that the downsides of raising oil prices will make the Earth's residents be unwilling to drive their own cars, which also leading the road to be less crowded than ever before.

Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that it is the best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Some people argue that the government should spend money only on medical care and education but not on theatres or sport stadium.Do you agree or disagree?

At the present time, the people of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

A noticeable lack of students opting for science subjects at universities is observed in various countries. What are the reasons and what are the effects on society?

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?