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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
Industrialization has led to the boom in human migration towards the locations where people can find work and flourish.
This
 attraction towards quality of life has resulted in demands of
colonies
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the colonies
 and houses, which is indispensable to people for
living
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a living
. As we think about metro cities, land availability for the construction is the biggest challenge. Population and commercialization have now
foster
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fostered
 to develop the outskirts of these cities, where townships are constructed and people with
few hours
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a few hours
 of travelling can reach their destination. Recently, my parents decided to shift into my city and stay closer to me, they find a hard time to get a house in the main area and
lastly
 they took their home in the countryside only.
This
 development of horizons is required as with a shorter distance to your workplace, family and friends and other necessities, one can cover them all.
However
, the
rises
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rise
rising
 in homes
at
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in
 outer areas are
also
 destructing the environment as well. We are constantly viewing in
media
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the media
, how some of the non-government organizations (NGOs) are coming forward to oppose
such
 developments as
that is
 impacting the natural habitat of the local communities and flora and fauna of those areas. To recapitulate,
government
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the government
 should come forward with some policies and programs where
environment
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the environment
 and colonization of humans can be
manage
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managed
 in a balanced way. And
also
 as a part of the community, we as a human should
also
 take some actions like living together and ending the culture of unit families. Buildings with
multistoried
 to be promoted rather than bungalow or houses which requires their individual space.
Such
 small and big steps can aid in the two said situations go hand in hand.
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