IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

Scientists have been warning for many years about protecting the environment and that people must limit the use of energy in their daily lives. Despite warnings, many people do not do so. What are the reasons for this and how can people be encouraged to protect the environment?

#scientists #years #environment #people #limit #energy #lives #warnings
From the invention of modern science, scientists have been warning that we have to protect our
environment
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 and to do so, we have to reduce the amount of
energy
 we are using now. But, many of us do not cut
their
Correct pronoun usage
our
show examples
uses
Change the noun form
use
show examples
 limit. the primary reasons for not following what scientists said are
lack
Correct article usage
a lack
show examples
 of
awareness
 and the high
cost
 of green
energy
. To encourage
people
 to reduce the
energy
uses
Correct subject-verb agreement
use
show examples
 limit,
government
 have to raise
awareness
 and decrease the
cost
 of green
energy
. As the
environment
 is degrading gradually, many
people
 are unable to see the changes in the
environment
. There are many
people
 in
this
 world who are still illiterate, and even some of the literate
people
 are not capable
to foresee
Change preposition
of foreseeing
show examples
 the upcoming
environment
Replace the word
environmental
show examples
 disaster.
For
example
, in the USA,
according to
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 survey by CNN, 30
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
 of the
people
 still do not know about the changes in the
environment
. The
people
 who are aware
about
Change the preposition
of
show examples
the issue have another problem, the high
cost
 of green
energy
.
For
example
, the price of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
solar
panel
Fix the agreement mistake
panels
show examples
 in the USA is so high that most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
middle income
Add a hyphen
middle-income
show examples
people
 cannot buy
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
show examples
. To encourage
people
 to cut their uses,
government
Add an article
the government
show examples
 have to take
initiative
Correct article usage
the initiative
show examples
 not only to increase
awareness
 but
also
 to decrease the
cost
 of green
energy
.
Netherlands
Correct article usage
The Netherlands
show examples
 is a great
example
 of
this
 matter. It is one of the countries
who
Correct pronoun usage
that
show examples
 suffer
for
Change preposition
from
show examples
 changes in the
environment
. The
government
 of
this
 country invest a lot of money to reduce renewable
energy
 costs.
For
example
, It
build
Change the verb form
builds
show examples
 lots of wind turbines to produce electricity. The result of
this
, the of making electricity is lowest among the European nations.
According to
 the Daily
observer
Capitalize word
Observer
show examples
,
Add an article
a
show examples
leading newspaper,it
also
increases
Wrong verb form
increased
show examples
 the
awareness
 campaign
Change preposition
by
show examples
20 times
2019
Change preposition
in 2019
show examples
 than the number of campaigns
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
in 2018. In conclusion, the elementary reasons
Change preposition
for
show examples
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
 not cutting the
Fix the agreement mistake
use
show examples
uses
Fix the agreement mistake
use
show examples
 of
energy
 are not
able
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
to understand the importance and the high
cost
 of green
energy
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 and to reduce the limits, the
government
 have to take action
such
 as
Wrong verb form
reducing
show examples
to reduce
Change the verb form
reducing
show examples
 the costs of producing renewable
energy
 and to build
awareness
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: