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In some countries, most people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of renting.

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In many countries in
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 world, the majority of the citizens like a rented home
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 of buying a home. The primary advantage of
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 decision is that it is cheaper. The major disadvantage of a rented
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 is that there are usually a lot of restrictions. In the 21st century, it is very common for a family to stay in a
house
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 that it did not purchase. People are now like to live in a place where lots of options available
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 as public transport, shopping malls, supermarkets, and jobs. The big cities are providing all of them, but in large cities, buying a home is way more costly than renting one.
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, according to the Chinese national television report, buying an apartment, which is a mini version of a full-size
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, in Hong Kong will cost more than one million dollars that are the sum of the 20 years total income of a middle class family there. For
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 reason, the majority of the people want a rented
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 rather than purchasing one. The main disadvantage of a rented
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 is that the landlord provides too many restrictions that it is hard for many people to follow.
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, According to the Department of Homeland Security of USA, on an average a rented
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 has 50 conditions that must be followed by
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the renter
renter
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, in the USA people who rent a
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 have to maintain utility facilities. Often times, it is harder to obey the conditions, because the people of the
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 usually busy with their jobs. In conclusion, like every coin has two sides, a rented
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 has both advantages and disadvantages. As rent is cheaper, it
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 comes with some bindings that must be followed.
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