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At present, science is developing quickly, but some people still have a high opinion of artists. What can the arts tell us of life that science cannot?

#science #people #artists #arts #life
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 constantly-changing
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, indeed that science has awarded and contribute a lot to our
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life
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lives
. It plays an undeniably crucial role to the society, but it seems does not satisfy in every aspect. I totally agree with those opinions that Arts is an indispensable part that cannot be missed. Human always seek for beauty in every corner of the
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 so the very
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 function of the
art
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 is to carry out those unique and attractiveness from different cultures, times and to take care of people's spiritual
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, refresh it.
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, the museum opens for people around the
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, from all nationalities and generations to contemplate and reflect or just simply relax. One more function of
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 is to be honoured like the Rushmore Mountain has been built to commemorate America's greatest presidents throughout the terms.
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,
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 can be used as a mean to help everyone get out of a dull, boring and uninteresting
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. Obviously,
art
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 can make
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 becomes a worthier place to live and showing one's personalities.
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, lots of research show that by decorating photos or paintings which include green colour in the workplace can help people get out of stress and pressure quickly.
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, different forms of
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 include dancing, music, literature, acting and drawing can help people a lot to broaden their awareness as well as express themselves. Or
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,
art
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 plays a vital role in supporting people to get a better, easier and more motivating
life
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. In conclusion, it seems to me that
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 science brings many crucial achievements for
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, it does not add entertainment for people,
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 arts still remain a high level in everyone's
life
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.
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