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Some people think that old people need to live in special communities, but others believe they should live with their family and adult children. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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While few experts believe that retirees should reside with certain people, whereas others confer that they must pass their life with their family members. In my opinion, living with their children would be the best idea.
This
 essay deals with the former and later view, followed by a conclusion.
To begin
 with, pensioners staying at old age homes do not become a problem for their family members. Since these individuals are sensitive, they require huge attention from their
care takers
a custodian who is hired to take care of something (property or a person)
caretakers
, which might not be available from their dear ones.
For instance
, people are shifting to cities, leaving their parents alone in pastoral areas, which could affect their health.
In addition
, these centres are
unde
at a position directly lower than (with the subject just above)
under
and
observation
Suggestion
the observation
 of trained citizens. As selected staff
are taking
Suggestion
is taking
is taken
will be taken
care
 of the old age people, they are able to
schedue
plan for an activity or event
schedule
 their eating habits and stay fit under trained supervisors.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
some locals are
againt
in contact with
against
 it and consider that
care
 of parents is their moral duty. While the aged citizens has accomplished their responsibility of nurturing their children, the children ought to take
care
 of their parents.
Moreover
, these people would instill ethical values in their
grand children
a child of your son or daughter
grandchildren
. As the
grand parents
a parent of your father or mother
grandparents
 are free from all activities, they can teach the young generation to be a perfect human.
For example
, the youngsters are usually
listening
(law) a proceeding (usually by a court) where evidence is taken for the purpose of determining an issue of fact and reaching a decision based on that evidence
hearing
 stories from their
grand parents
a parent of your father or mother
grandparents
, which could stimulate them to be honest in
thier
of them or themselves
their
 life. In conclusion,
although
 the experts think that specific atmosphere would be suitable for older people, I firmly advocate that they must stay with their family, as children must take
care
 of their parent and even these people can teach
the young
Suggestion
younger
 children morally.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • senior citizens
  • tailored
  • accessible facilities
  • professional healthcare
  • socializing
  • fosters
  • alleviates
  • familial bonds
  • emotional support
  • sense of belonging
  • intergenerational living
  • preference
  • personal circumstances
  • independent living
  • balanced approach
  • prioritized
  • family dynamics
  • well-being
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