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skilled workers moving abroad ;reasons and problems

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Many are of the opinion that those who are sharp
at
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in
on
 their field of study will fix their career to go overseas.
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According
 to me
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it has both pros and cons.
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 with
,
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it is the most talkative issue around the world. All the educative people around the globe are searching a better career to live in
this
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competative
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
 world.
As a result
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,
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many skilled people wish to go abroad
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Besides
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there are so many reasons behind
this
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.
First
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 of all
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 the education quality of all the country are not up to the mark.
For instance
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the students of Bangladesh
,
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India and Pakistan are move to outside of
there
of them or themselves
their
 country for their children's future.
Secondly
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there are some people who think that by going
abroad they
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abroad, they
 will earn
much better salary
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a much better salary
 than
ther
of them or themselves
their
there
her
 own land.Recently a study conducted by the university of OXFORFD that, the people who go abroad for education purpose or job will introduce new culture
,
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,
tradition
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costume and so on.
On the contrary
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there are so many disadvantages.
Educative
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Educated
 people are the property of a nation.Through
this
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 the country
loss
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
loses
 their valuable citizen.The BBC WORLD reported that
,
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,
in 2018,47%
swedish
of or relating to or characteristic of Sweden or its people or culture or language
Swedish
 people move to
UK
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the UK
,
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,
USA
,
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CANADA and over many
region
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regions
 just to live in good
circumastances
your overall circumstances or condition in life (including everything that happens to you)
circumstances
.
As a result
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,
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developing or under developing countries are
suffer
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suffering
 from diverse facilities. To sum up
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It seems to me that
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ofcourse there
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of course, there
of course there
 are certainly some potential view.
Indeed going
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Indeed, going
 abroad is a controversial issue.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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