Eating too much sugar is harmful for our health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people’s sugar consumption, while others think that it is an individual responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is true that excess of everything is bad even it is sweet like
sugar
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. In my opinion, it is the responsibility of both government and individual to put a strict check and balance in the
amount
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of
sugar
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they eat in order to spend a healthy life. (48) We had seen in the past that people always had a moderate usage of
sugar
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. They eat
sugar
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on
daily basis
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a daily basis
in various food items, but never take
over dose
dose too heavily
overdose
.
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why they lived a simple but healthy life. (40) Presently, the
amount
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of
sugar
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we eat
everyday
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every day
is surprisingly increased to
dangerous level
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dangerous levels
a dangerous level
.
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is because of several reasons.
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, children always like to eat sweet items of bakery that consist a high
amount
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of
sugar
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.
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, adults
also
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take tea and drinks despite the fact that they contain high
amount
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of
sugar
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. The governments are putting
lot
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a lot
of efforts to overcome
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issue.
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, it is
also
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the moral duty of every individual to lower the consumption of
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in order to protect him from certain health issues. (91) The recent development has forced the governments to spread public awareness and pass proper legislation against the overuse of
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.
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Thus individuals
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Thus, individuals
also
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have to check the
amount
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of
sugar
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used in the preparation of any food while purchasing it.
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, if the governments as well as individuals keep on limiting the
amount
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of
sugar
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they eat,
then
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our new generation will surely be more active and healthy. (68)
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, in my opinion, it is a team work of both government and individuals which is necessary to limit the
amount
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of
sugar
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that people eat on
daily basis
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a daily basis
. (29)
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