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Some people think that public libraries are no longer important, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

#people #libraries
Any
library
that is
 accessible for
general public
Suggestion
the general public
 and is usually funded from public sources like taxes is known as
public
Suggestion
a public library
the public library
public libraries
library
. In my opinion, public libraries have certainly lost some of their importance;
however
,
this
 does not mean that they are no longer needed. (45) We had seen in the past that people always spend some time in the public libraries on
daily basis
Suggestion
a daily basis
. Public libraries were considered a symbol of literate and educated population. In short, public libraries were
the great
Suggestion
the greatest
 source of reliable knowledge in the past. (44) Presently, the public libraries are available in almost all the parts of the world. Nowadays, people of any age like to get
public
Suggestion
a public library membership
library
 membership in order to access
wide range
Suggestion
a wide range
 of books, magazines and newspapers free of cost.
Moreover
, the public libraries are not only offered all
kind
Suggestion
kinds
 of
study
materials but
Accept comma addition
materials, but
also
 provide an excellent environment for studies.
On the other hand
, the invention of computer and internet has certainly reduced the number of public
library
 users. It is now possible for people to
study
 books of their own choice and read newspapers over the internet
instead
 of moving towards public libraries. (104) The recent development in Science and Information technology has enabled the people to
study
 any material over the internet.
Thus
, if the people keep on preferring online
study
,
then
 the public libraries will surely
lost
Suggestion
lose
 their importance in the near future. (41)
Hence
, in my opinion,
although
 the public libraries have lost some of their importance,
however
, they are still needed because they have old books and manuscripts that are not available online. (31)
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