A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.

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Love and compassion are the golden possessions of mankind.
Its
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It's
the love for family and compassion to grow that pushed man outside comfort zone to explore, innovate and prosper. Today we have revolutionised to the extend where we have self doubt if we value people for what they have or for what they are. Just because birds rest on ground to prey on worms, it doesn’t mean they do not fly anymore. Technology
have evolved
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has evolved
is evolving
, digitalisation is in full swing. Its new, its fancy and people appreciate
such
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things but
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things, but
it surely doesn’t mean that they do not value people for their trustworthiness and kindness. As long as mankind exists
affinity
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an affinity
for real emotions would co-exist. Changes are
constant but
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constant, but
the universe is enviably in force to make sure that we stay grounded. We have witnessed hurricanes, tsunamis, earthquakes and what not? People have helped people in all cases irrespective of their status quo. There are hundreds and thousands of charity funds flowing for a good cause, it shows our old fashioned values of giving back to
people
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the people
. Great leaders to commoners individual achievements have always been celebrated
.
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.
True value, hard work and kindness
is
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are
the core behind
man kind
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
mankind
. As we are born, born with us is the tendency to adapt.
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adaptations with time might have changed the way we project
ourselves but
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ourselves, but
it could never change the feelings that we innately possess. The need for true relationships, longing for trustworthiness, when
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the thing named or in question
it
discovered no one affords to give up on it. People might seem
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
excited about fancy things,
excitement fades
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the excitement fades
with
time but
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time, but
ecstasy
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the ecstasy
of reality is constant and consistent. It is these morale over which the mankind’s existence rests.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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