The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centers. It is feared that this trend can bring negative influences on the youths and the society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Nowadays, the adolescents visit shopping malls as a recreational activity which may result in drastic effects. I completely agree that

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recent practice is making youngsters materialistic and unhealthy.

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of all, using leisure time in shopping centres tend to make people materialistic and extravagant. The teenagers are vulnerable target audience as well as psychologically and cognitively rather immature.

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, there is a trend among

newer generation

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the newer generation

newer generations

a newer generation

to show

off which

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off, which

leads to competition in the society. Because of that, a lot of youngsters end up buying things that are not even

needed which

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needed, which

ultimately disrupt their foundation while setting them on

wrong path

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the wrong path

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, a survey in Australia, in 2010, showed that teenagers were buying jewellery, notably diamond rings or necklace, mostly to show off their status and how well-off they are.

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, while strolling in malls, one comes across a lot of

food

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stalls. It is already apparent that the youth population prefers unhealthy dining options rather than a well-balanced and home cooked diet.

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, the

food

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areas has very tempting sight and aroma which compels people to buy it. Not only it leads to more waste of money, but it

also

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prones

question or examine thoroughly and closely

probes

primes

prone

them to bad health.

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, in an interview, the OPTP

(

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(

fast

food

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restaurant) manager, admitted that they have more sales in a shopping centre’s

food

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section than in their other branches. In conclusion, in my opinion, the rising trend of spending time in shopping

malls among

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malls, among

the youth is bringing unwanted effects

such

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as spending money unwisely as well as opting junk

meals

the bags of letters and packages that are transported by the postal service

mails

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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261 words

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The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centers. It is feared that this trend can bring negative influences on the youths and the society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think that university education should be free, while others believe students should pay for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Young people prefer listening to music rather than listening to the news on the radio. Is this a positive or a negative trend? Provide reasons and examples for your opinion.

Some students prefer classes with frequent discussions between the professor and the students with almost no lectures. Other students prefer classes with many lectures and almost no discussions. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is no doubt that globalisation has benefited the world by bringing together people, business and nations. People who criticise it stand in the way of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?