In many countries Women no longer feel the need to get married. Some people believe that this is because women are able to earn their own income and therefore do not require the financial security that marriage can bring. To what extent do you agree ?

I don`t think
this
is primarily reason for
this
problem I think
lot
Suggestion
lots
of reason has been existing that lead to
this
. In the past people had
different attitude
Suggestion
a different attitude
different attitudes
about
get
Suggestion
to get
getting
married they
Accept comma addition
married, they
find
Suggestion
found
a girl for their son persuade him to get married to her, very simple and nothing else, but now unfortunately people increase their expectation wants ideal things for
marriage
in addition
marriage
restriction like
protect
Suggestion
to protect
protecting
baby
Suggestion
the baby
babies
, protect family, etc. People have lot of advantages for being single and not to get married but when they get married they limited by husband and baby and couldn`t achieve their wish
besides
when you being single you can change your life immediately without worried about someone else In summery when we want talk about
marriage
or being single you should consider two different thing with two different advantage
besides
people think
marriage
not wide open
Submitted by rasoulf1020 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: