Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Health is an important thing for a human being.There is a proverb,"Health is wealth." A healthy
person
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can lead a cheerful
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.
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an unhealthy
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lead
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leads
a miserable
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.So we should follow up a
diet
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plan
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for
make
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making
our
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healthy and joyful. From the passage I can see some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and
diet
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.I agree with their opinion because every
person
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is different.Every
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has
different lifestyle
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a different lifestyle
different lifestyles
and different food habit.So it is impossible to follow up or maintain a same
diet
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plan
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or same food habit for everybody. So we should make a healthy
diet
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plan
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and
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maintain it properly individually.
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hand in
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the passage others believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy
diet
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.I cannot agree with
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opinion completely
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I think it is not possible to take care all of the citizens by the government because of the different lifestyle of them.Government can produce more fresh vegetables
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fresh fruits
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fish
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meat
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etc
continuing in the same way
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. And Government can increase the awareness among the pupil about
healthy
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a healthy diet plan
diet
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plan
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for their healthy
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.
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of all we can see that we have to be more concern about our
heathy
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
diet
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plan
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because of our healthy
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. We should maintain a good
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plan
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individually cause only
govrnment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
governments
cannot change ourselves if we don't aware about us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health-conscious decisions
  • self-discipline
  • informed choices
  • personal accountability
  • regulating food industries
  • implementing policies
  • healthy eating
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies for healthy food
  • enabling environment
  • accessible
  • affordable
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